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Here we are with part two of chapter one, kind of confused about that point (but I think it must've just been DA's upload limits or something) so let's see how the remainder of the first chapter holds up.

Like last time let's start with the bad:
Not much here to talk about, just some minor typos and the like.

Now let's get to the good stuff:
Pigu seems somewhat interesting, as the second female lead she can work and seeing how her and Hana interact and grow seems like it'd be an enjoyable read.

Overall it's a pretty standard piece, it's not it's fault as it's just a continuation of chapter one but it had to be cut off kind of ruining it's flow. Still a decent chapter and a pretty good set up for further stuff.
A story about a fox girl in a magical school, while not the most original it's still a solid premise, so let's see how it worked out.

First let's go over the bad:
The Darkshadow thing just seems wierd, I get it's something that will be important later, but in the context of this chapter it's just kind of odd and somewhat out of place.
Also a minor bit try using the ' quotation for emphasis instead of " mainly because it makes the reader believe the dialogue was ending or begining again. It's only a minor bit, but every little bit helps.

Now let's go over the good:
Hana seeks like a pretty good character and how she got into the magic school was an entertaining bit.
The magic system seems like it could be somewhat interesting, but only time will tell.

Overall a decent first outing and a decent start to this work.
Well it's almost November so it's time to bring this year to a close, with this there won't be an uploads until 2017. So with that said Digimon R2 will be put on hiatus while everything else has reached it's conclusion (except for the mini-series). 

See you in 2017

Well it's almost November so it's time to bring this year to a close, with this there won't be an uploads until 2017. So with that said Digimon R2 will be put on hiatus while everything else has reached it's conclusion (except for the mini-series). 

See you in 2017

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